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The black cat purred, arching into her caress behind the ear, its little nose twitching adorably. She smiled, contentedly waving her wand and letting the dishes do themselves.

Outside her humble abode, the rain was falling, a steady pit-pat. She could hear a hum of voices.

The villagers were here to call her a monster. A witch. They spat the word as if it was dirty.

At least there wouldn't be any torches today.

"Why don't you just turn them into mice?" The cat asked, with a sly grin.

"I prefer to think I'm not as unreasonable as them."
I wrote this drabble (100 words exact) on a whim.
Is the theme of this piece of writing clear enough?
Does the briefness of it make it more pleasant to read or not descriptive enough?
Critiques are welcome and comments are appreciated :D
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Nordica93 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2010  Student Writer
Having just read about the plight of so-called 'witches' in Ghana, this little story made me smile. I like how you have set up a cosy atmosphere in just a few words; however, I still think that you could do more to the existing sentences. For example, you could add more detail to the action of the dishes washing themselves. But overall, a very enjoyable little effort.
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Dark-McCloudy Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2010
:aww: I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I suppose I could have added more to that scene, but then I would have had to chop off something else to keep it at hundred words exact (TT^TT). Maybe someday I'll write a longer sequel tho :D~
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